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| wilko4523 2008-07-21 ch 1,  | abusehey this is really good i love the imagery and the ending was certainly amusing lol-yes, why elope with light bulbs haahha ive edited my thingie lol i love the beauty of the poem as well and the contrast it makes with the rather creepy and harsh words-for example harsh, boiling, reacting, wired amazing! xx |
| McKinley Cooper 2008-06-14 ch 1, | abuseGod, that's beautiful. Sch beauty and harshness in one voice. Incredible! McKinley |
| iloveanimecartoons 2008-06-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseUm...dude...that was...yeah... AWESOME's a word I could use. Would it encompass all the feelings inspired from this piece, though? Heh. Doubt it. I really enjoyed your play on words that had a way of going in at least 3 ways at once while staying with a basic theme. Fav lines: Out of my soul and onto the flames so they’ll grow Higher and higher and soon I’m wired With the newness of electric chemistry Reacting inside of me Blue and molten and boiling Beneath my skin with a feverish glow Crawling under my knuckles and knees Playing my parts like piano keys And... Yes, why elope with light bulbs Though they’ll never leave They’re such a waste of electricity Great job! |
| SirScott 2008-06-01 ch 1, | abuseIn one word beautiful. ~SirScott |
| kloun doll 2008-05-31 ch 1, | abuseI just felt a lot of passion from this, the imageries were very mysterious and magical for some reason. my favorite part is: Because I gave my body over to the sun And made love to its arms and legs good poem. |
| the face in the window 2008-05-30 ch 1, | abusewow. you've probably heard this a million time, but: you have such a gift. you really do. amazing. rowan. |
| Tytherpol 2008-05-30 ch 1, | abuse"Impregnated with the expectations of noise" the whole poem's really honest and well written. i really like it. |