I was definitely tearing up near the end...this was such a beautiful story. You're a very gifted writer. I love how you developed the characters--Day with all his wisdom but his inherent ignorance of his own emotions and Airick with his intrinsic /goodness/ and ability to be so accepting despite the life he's had...and I love the way you progressed their relationship. It was so natural that they would develop feelings for each other, and it made me smile.

I also really liked how you worked the ocean into your story without making it seem too repetitive.

And I liked the way you structured the chapters...with Day's pov but alternating the present narration with a kind of reflection, I guess, and also Airick's journal entries.

I really, really love this story (in case you couldn't already tell) and thank you so much for sharing!

I will definitely be going to your profile to read more of your work.

Hello, I must say this story absolutely blew me away. I started it last night around ten pm and, after spending my class periods today doodling Day and Airick, I finally finished it a few minutes ago.
Your writing in Day's thoughts and feelings was MARVELOUS. You captured so many perspectives of an immortal entity; it was so fascinating and caught my attention at once.
Great stories and great writing like yours are what really inspire me to chip away at my own!

(crying) this the most moving tale i ever read. i love the story and how you end it. it's all perfect. hope to read more storeis from you. please read mine and give you expert advice. thank you for a great , moving tale.

I am completely speechless.

My friend e-mailed me this story a few weeks ago, and I didn't think that I would like it, but here I am crying at it's ending!
It was SO awesome and amazing and aah! I can't explain it!
I really hope you continue writing!! it'd be such a shame not to!
Ne ways, good luck with all your endeavors and thanks for posting all of this!
Much love!

I read your story and I found it beautiful. There's something in your writing style, or maybe in the story itself, that I just can't put a name onto and makes me keep reading. Congratulations.
If there were a single thing to point, though, is that you left us wondering who's the mysterious woman that shows Day the ocean. I bet you did it un purpose, and the story does wrap up nicely, but I keep thinking of her. I'd like to know her story...

This is a wonderful start! You have crafted intriguing characters that have stolen my interest. I'll be reading this to the end, I think.

You have created some very interesting variations to witches, Djinni (jeanie?) and other types of magic. I'm pleased with your originality.

It's beautiful with a bitter sweet. I really like your characters.

Oh my god. I don't exactly know where to start. This story is so amazing. I loved every second I was reading and just feeling like I was in this world. I am sad that I am done reading this story, just for the the fact that I enjoyed reading it so much. Which to be honest hasn't happened in a long time. I love how you slowly had them fall in love. Which most people don't seem to be doing these days. The characters were so easy to fall in love with (well Day and Airick hehe). I love how you tied it all in together in the end. Such a wonderful story I will defiantly be coming back to re-read this again sometime in the future. There were a couple spelling errors and I wish I wrote them down or something, but for the most part they were just simple errors. Nothing that takes away from the story. When I get a chance I will re-read it and try and catch a couple of em.

Thank you again. Amazing, amazing story.

-Yusta

That was amazing. Truly fabulous. So well written, concise, and interesting. Thank you for writing such an amazing story. Keep up the excellent work.

This was utterly amazing, I can honesty say this was one of the most original well writer stories I have ever read. I finished it in one day unable to stop myself from reading, I feel sad that its finished but at the same time I feel so estatic! Haha the ending was fantasic! And the little twist caused my jaw to drop, honesty once again this was amazing!!

Yo, awesome story. I loved your characters and the way that you wrote such an interesting twist on immortality :)

I noticed that you confused 'apart' with 'a part' sometimes. It wasn't anything that detracted from the story though, so no worries. Thank you for a riveting read!

The story was really bautiful. Your writing too was excellent. I also liked the way you spelt 'djinni'. The characters were very well drawn and the entire thing was thought out very nicely. I like how their love developed gradually and not like, 'One fine morining, in the garden, Day looked at Airick's eyes andd felt butterflies inside his stomach'. I never would have guessed that Akima was Airick's mother. I also harboured the idea that Airick's mother was the immortal who is mentioned throughout the story, the one who said to Day that the sea reminds them that even though they will till time stops, they could still transform etc. Btw, about that, you never mentioned who that immortal was. That is the only plothole I found in your story. Anyway, I'm looking forward to more stories like this. Continue your work and thank you for posting this story.

That was a really cool story. It's fine. There aren't that many spelling mistakes that you should worry about other than the fact that you always spell apart as one word even though sometimes it should be 2(A Part). It's confusing sometimes. But it's not THAT big a deal. Again, amazing story. I really enjoyed it. I just want to know one thing, What was the Djinni's original name?

WOW is all I have to say. It is such an epic story. I like the unexpected twist, though I must admit just as some other reviewer has admitted previously, I have to read this again to really wrap my mind around the story. I wonder if I had read this too hurrily in my attempt to devour it all it one go but I never quite got what entails the the curse that was placed upon Airick.

Anyhow, continue writing. This story was amazing!

It had the best ending to any story i have ever read. I not only loved the story but i felt an attachment to the characters as well. I don't know what else to say besides that i honestly loved this story.