I like your style for this poem, it's different. Very nice poem.

I really like this. It's short and says little, but it IMPLIES so much that you could think about it for ages. I like how it's kind of ambiguous in meaning. The repetition is well done and the last line pulls it together beautifully. I must admit that the lines 'so at to reveal

very little.' seem the break the flow a bit, but otherwise I wouldn't change a thing.