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roast beef 2008-06-20 . chapter 2
Lovely second chapter. It was a little on the short side, but.. Meh. Good luck for next chapter! THis review would be longer on any other day... but I'm going to NZ in an hour. :O And don't post next chapter without me! Unless you're really desperate... :D Good luck.
roast beef 2008-05-31 . chapter 1
lol why isn't it till AFTER I see a mistake I missed? "I repeated in my mind as walked down the hallway." should have another "I" in it. SO anyway, that was a nice start. I liked the last line :D
Update next chapter!!
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