Aw this chapter is so cute. I really like the pairing of these two. Update soon! I'm really enjoying the story!

I am really enjoying this story, I hope we get to see more soon.

Aw, love it! (:

Yes, the characters write the story themselves lol. Wow, that's an awesome chapter. It is extremely well written!

"Humble much?"
That's so me!! Yay!

Man, I want a Derrick, forget Edward!

Eric is such an idiot...take a hint loser

O my goodness those two finally kissed! Like finally...ever since they ran into the forest i'm just like frick get it over with kiss already! Finally you let them kiss!
Update soon

Hahaha, cute chappie!

So now I have to wait for the next chapter do I? Something tells me that Eric came back, that creeper can't take a hint can he?
Something some girls can relate to. Great job I can't wait for the next chapter!

What a nice title: Right Before My Eyes, very original...same as Time Makes the Heart Grow Weary. All your chapters seem to end with a cliffhanger...and that's what I love, it keeps the reader on the edge of their seat.
So a whole new book, a whole new set of characters. So far the characters seem realistic and easy to relate to: the guy who won't get the hint, the jock, and the one who is just in-between.

Short and sweet

But...
Then I realized why.

WHAT?!

OOh! I'm a sucker for stories like that. :) Shocker at the end. Is Derrick really like that??!! And Eric's really quick. Wahaha. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Yay! New story!
And I like it, your writing has definitely improved. Your dialogue is way better.

There was Derrick, with grey-blue eyes (check!), and shaggy brown(wrong!) hair, charming(check!), and popular(check!) and then there was me: long black hair(wrong!) that fell messily to my sides, hazel eyes, clumsy(bahahaha!), and extremely intelligent(modest and humble hun!). He was the best of the best("He" is going to LOVE you when "he" reads this) and I was the lowest of the low(awwe!); him the football(soccer!) captain and me, well let’s just say sports wasn’t my “thing”.


Lifting my head up I saw Derricks(typo?) pale face looking down at me, his eyes sparkling.
“Yeah, I guess we didn’t,” I mumbled, wishing he’d take the hint and leave.
“The name’s Eric.”
“Lindsay.”
“Nice to meet you Lindsay.”