Ouch. Poor Liam! And with the next competition coming up soon too! I hope they find him, and I hope they work this out, cos I don't want to see him and Jen lose. And I don't want to see their relationship over before it gets started either! Update soon!!

Yay for Jen and Liam!! And sucked in to Ruby! Although ... a small part of me felt sorry for her in this. Her mum is a **. But it was only a small part that felt sorry for her. The rest of me was going "Yay!!" ^_< Anyway, awesome work, and I hope to see more soon!!

I hate Ruby. Total **. Jen should just punch her out and be done with it ^_< lol, but this was an awesome chapter! I hope they pull everything together, and I can't wait to see how things go in Mexico! Update soon! ^_^

I like how you've gone back to 2003. It's going to be interesting to see how the road will be paved to the event you briefly touched upon. Good work.

Definently a good start, just really short. I'll continue onto chapter two. And it seems you have an original idea going.
By the way Corago: Volume II has been up. I hope you will continue on with reading.

Very cool!! I love how well they work together ... but tell me, do we have some revenge coming up for Jen? I wanna see her get Ruby good! Awesome work though, and I can't wait for more!!

I wish I had $50 I could whip out for betting. :P Gotta love teenage drama.

Update!

The flashback caught me off-guard. But they got the death spiral yay!

Ok more chapters to read.

Kk here I am! Interesting development with Elyse getting banned from the rink too. I like the introduction of Liam too. He's got that take-charge style that does make him seem more secure. (And I seem to be picturing him as a young John Zimmerman with blue eyes...)

-"Of course, she had started from the bottom up, just like he had always told her too." Try switching "too" to "to."

-"But, she was a good skater and did as her director told her. " This sentence just seems too childish for the tone you're setting. It seems like some humor that isn't quite there. I know that she's a young woman, but with this it seems like you're trying to show that even though that her directors/coaches expect her to be extremely mature for her age, she has "slip ups" to remind the audience that she's just 15. Make any sense? It did in my head. :P If you want her to appear more mature, consider something of the nature: "But instead she kept her composure and masked her true emotions by leaving as the director ordered."

I like the title. I can't remember if this was the original or not (my memory has been shot lately, forgive me). And I will click over to the next chapters after this. Good job!

What a **! Too bad Liam is such a nice guy; he should have smacked Ruby back! God I hope she falls at a training session and breaks an ankle or something. She so deserves it! Anyway, awesome chapter! Can't wait for the next one!! ^_^

Awesome chapter!! Yay for Liam and Jen! lol, and I was giggling at his old partner too. What a selfish little cow, who isn't even that great at skating. Liam's so much better off ^_^ Update soon!

hi! i love this story...it's really interesting and i can't wait to read the next chapter. there is a lot of dialogue along with flashbacks which all make it a really well-written story.
keep up the good work! :D
and if u have time, check out some of the stories i've written! i'm 1/4 way through a fiction story, and i've also written a series of poems.

I've read the first 3 chapters of this, haven't I? I don't remember chapter 4, so I'm guessing that its new ... and I love Liam. He seems like a cheeky guy, but real sweet. And yay for him and Jen being able to skate in time to one another! And for both being oddballs who spin the wrong way ^_< Awesome work!!

I agree, there is a lack of good figure skating writing.

Ok the one thing that bothered me the most was the age consistency in Jennifer's age. First you say "At the tender age of fifteen" only to make her magically a year older in "as the sixteen year old went through the routine."

I like where this is going and I'm hoping for an update!