This is really good!
I love this!
Keep going!

update soon!

i love it so far.


xo failwithpride

Great chapter! So we finally meet Alex! More soon?

i hope she can find a guy that will date her soon!

wow...Alex is an **. I hope he has to work EXTREMELY hard to get her to agree to going out with him! Update soon!

love from
TammyS3

Good chapter... and I love Alex! Can't wait to see more interactions with Dhalia. They do make an awesome couple and he's yummy to boot :) Can't wait, write faster, so long as you arent using the story to procrastinate school work, that is bad :)

haha yay we finally meet the infamous alex, great chemistry between the two haha i hope this wont be too cliched.

Lmao, loved the first meeting between Alex and Dahlia. Very nicely done. xDD Keep writing.

- HT

That was sad, yet completely amazing.

this was quite enjoyable. funny how love fades a lot faster than annoyance. haha. I can't wait to read more!
~Mel

where the hell is alex?

...hate cliffhangers.

...but the plot sounds pretty interesting. XD

...so much filler...X_X

Is this really necessary? cuz I feel as if the story would be better if you interjected the background info. as the story progresses instead of putting it all at the beginning.

LMAO. I love it. XD Keep me posted. :]

WOO THE DOORKNOB'S GONE. O_O

"Anna *wormed* her way into our hearts..." I think you mean?

"Alex was the only member of the family *whom* I *had* yet to see."

"An amusing *threat*, but a *threat* nonetheless."

"Putting both hands on *his* shoulders,"

"...apologies for the paparazzi, *assuring* Isabel that the restaurant had nothing..."

"In the car I was given the 411 on Paolo Gutierrez, though the tiny bit about him being the son of the man who might be the next commander-in-chief of Argentina was left out of the equation, and from what I’ve heard, even without the whole possible first-son task thrown into the mix, this man was making a name for himself." This seems kinda long to be one sentence... I think it needs some semicolons, or hyphens, or a period somewhere. =)

"he *had* the ambition of being a politician himself,"

"At thirty, Paolo *wanted* to set his sights... *intended to pursue* the life of a politician."

"Rugged features marred his face..." Are you sure that 'marred' is the word you want to use? It generally has a negative connotation...

"Turning towards the sink, I *turned* on the water and washed my hands, *the* cold water seeming to have a soothing effect for my nerves."

"My breathing had become *shallow* and uncontrollable."

...

Again, I love you, but beyond that I think I actually have something constructive to say for once. It seems to me that you use the same words repeatedly throughout your chapters. For example, "drilled." You used that, I think, each time Dahlia & co ran into someone new. Nick was "drilled" by her mother in the car from the airport, Anna was "drilling" Dahlia's mother about Toronto, etc. Although, you did use "quizzed" for Dahlia's mother to Isabel and Paolo at the restaurant. =) Yay! While it's not a big deal and probably only freaks like me would notice, it's just one of those things to look out for. =)

And as to the ending-- hahahahahaha! Lol, rofl, lmao, and all that jazz. Oh, golly, I sure as heck didn't see that one coming. Goodness, you're amazing. I'm so glad this story is back up and running. =)

Love like always,
Shoe.