Very cryptic, especially the hallucination's dialogue. "It comes to you..." Chilling yet mysterious, haunting because it could have meant anything.

The ending was also unique, I like how you left it open and let us readers imagine what was lurking at the door but didnt reveal it. The unknown is always a scary thing, isnt it?

I feel like you did a good job capturing the paranoia that comes from schizophrenia and that hallucination was great. Subtle, not impossibly bizzare. Same with the auditory half of it. It was all believable and in reality hallucinations arent usually incredibly realistic or as vivid like what is portrayed in the cinema.

A wonderful piece here, a pleasure to read.

Nice story.

I liked the idea that you showed here, as I am a fan of the psychological horror myself. It isn't easy to write but you show his paranoia well. One thing that surprised me was that this short story took place over a few days, as opposed to most which are a few hours at most. That said it didn't seem thin or empty, so kudos there.

I've written a bit of psychological horror and I know how hard it can be to write, especially going between dreams and reality (shameless plug - CRACKED PORCELAIN). You show that he is very scared and tired, even making me feel a bit tired myself. Your writing is clean but a little different (somehow) to most of the stuff I read here. Nice work.

I enjoyed this and even hoped for more chapters at the end. Again, nice work and keep writing!

I'm kinda confused at the end...um...what happened?

Other than that it was amazing. I know what it's like to not be able to sleep, and when you hallucinate things because of it...that's just scary.

Nice work.

Interesting how you introduce the idea with a lecture from a professor.

However, I highly doubt a professor would concede that what a schizofrenic sees is possibly real. I'd do a little more research and say how in some cultures, the mentally ill are considered more sane, or more in tune with life than anyone else. I've taken several psych courses, and it's extremely doubtful that anyone would agree to that point. And it really doesn't have to do with philosophy, philosophy has to do more with "The State of Nature," and truth. Although I understand this is just someone saying it, and thus can be ambiguous or fallible.

It's an interesting start though. The only other thing that bothered me, was that you don't really paint a setting at all. IT seems your characters are moving around in empty space. But definately an interesting piece.

Hope this helps to improve a little.