|Reviews for The Legend of the Phantom Wolf|
| WhenceComethThisBoredom 10/3/08 . chapter 1
"One day the princess wandered into the forest and met there two. " : two what? This omission meant it took a while for me to understand what was going on afterwards. Like, when there was suddenly some black wolf, I got a bit confused, because it seemed to come out of nowhere, as did the hunter. You've got a bit of proofreading errors... perhaps this is what you wanted your beta to find, though you DIDN'T SPECIFY on The Review Game Beta Board. Mostly your problems are with omitted words and parts of words. Methinks you should read it over with a careful eye to omissions and re-post the document (you don't have to make a new story to do so) with your changes. That would make the story infinitely easier to understand.
| MagicWords 6/10/08 . chapter 1
so the scene always repeats itself? cool.
alright one suggestion: i think you should clean up the last two paragraphs. it is a tad bit unclear but understandable if you read it again. so yeah, i mean, it's just a suggestion.
other than that, nicely done.
| Iccle Fairy 6/2/08 . chapter 1
lovely story very nicely written!