Your words are like a sledgehammer of stupidity smashing into my brain. I'm a worse person for having bothered to read this

Quite good, indeed. And rather interesting.

a poisonous whisper filtered through my legs

i love that line and the f word in each stanza

its anger and wonder

i really, really love this.

the profane "dragback fuck", derogatory "faggot"

both fit very well, a hot but not very sweet picture.

it gives me this image of sculptures

having sex under neon lights.

it's beautiful.

it's like a song. it's noteworthy that you can make such a menial thing seem so galatic, if that evne makes sense. "your body, my body- hardened clay as we break- shatter in the name of body-art poetry." the ending is sort of witty to me, kind of a smirk. and lastly: interesting, if not eye-catching, title.

amazing piece. Well written. . .just great work. Keep it up!

Faith