you have a pretty good story here. I wonder who Shinn is to Nasierra and how she'll ccope with Subaru. I kind of feel sorry for him. Also, you have a few errors like 'fro' instead of 'for' 'here' instead of 'her' and 'cute' instead of 'cut' but they can all be fixed with a quick beta read. Also, please try to remember not to begin a sentence with a conjunction.

I await your next chapter.

Senpai, anata wa warui... Next chapter onegaishimasu... I didn't expect that the one who save Sierra is Shinn and it was unexpected that he is also an angel... Good Luck and Take Care senpai

Interesting story... its like prince of tennis and DN angel in one... can't wait to read the next chapter...

nice prologue it makes curious and it really makes me want to read the story... keep up the good work...

Drop?
Uwa~ I love this.. At first I thought Nash was Kame'nash'i.. XD
Joke, joke.. XD
Oh, what's going to happen to Sierra and Subaru now?..
Please update soon!.. ^^

This was a pretty good chapter. Some of the wording should have been a little different. Like in one sentence you wrote even more smiled. It should have been smiled even more. A quick beta read should finish that. Also, you desribed the characters too often with eye color. Try to find other descriptive qualities, like body structure or attitude to describe your characters.

Other then that, you did a good job with the action and plot. Everything is well drawn out and your characters are also very fleshed out. Good job!

I was a slave to the story, but it had a few critical flaws that made it difficult to picture:

Too many times have you reminded us of Nasierra's eye color; it's as if you're bragging about them being silver.

Some descriptive parts were a combination of simple and overworked. Far too much use of esque-colours (bluish, reddish, blackish, etcetera).

However, it does a great job of making up for this with the rest of the writing, guiding the reader along an elegant path to the end of the chapter!

You wanted me to read something of yours and I kept my promise! It's late but I finally got caught up enough with my works to be able to read some of your stuff. I had been waiting for a break and I've worked my fingers to the bone all weekend long.

This story is very good. I like the tragic feel that both characters emit and I must admit that I'm a sucker for angel stories that's why I have such works as Sacrifice and Tsurugi: Tsubasa no Gedatsu.

I do hope that you continue this piece and I only found one flaw. When you wrote that Subaru had something he want to tell her. It would have been wanted. Other then that you have a magnificent story.

I could really feel the pain of the two characters and I wonder what will happen to Subaru now. Will he go on a search to find Sierra? What will happen when he does?

I'll definitely be watching this story. Thank you for reading my works, and if you're still intrested, feel free to read my new updates.

Ah, so sad D: The "melancholy" shone through perfectly to match the mood of the two characters (and the quote). Can't wait to see where this is going!

The very first sentence had me at "You" :D Though I would try to break up the large intro paragraph to make it a bit easier to follow...Other than that, great job!!

just what are trying to make me feel?..haha i love it..
you're making me cry ya know..

Awwhh, this was so sweet ^_^
Towards the end I even felt like I was going to cry!
Can't wait to see you adapt on this story
Good stuff matey (Y)