Wow.. most of your story gives me creeps.. haha but most of them are really GREAT! keep it up!

Interesting thing to read after reading Jodi Picoult's "Nineteen Minutes" for class, haha. I think this works very well; I like the ending, particularly. Yay for corrupting the little children. And stories where the little guy, be he man or boy, gets his revenge are always so heartwarming to the rest of us little guys.

I sort of think, though, that more detail might have helped; I don't mean in the descriptions, those were plenty detailed. I mean, what exactly did Jeremy's mother do to him? I know you mentioned it, but, to me at least, it didn't seem like enough to drive someone to murder. Of course, I'm the poster-child for the oblivious folks. :Smiles: I also wonder about Jeremy's mental state to start with, his mother's motives for the abuse, and how old Jeremy is that he can decide so cleanly to murder his mum. But I am, as I said, rather oblivious, and sometimes need to be hit over the head with a sledgehammer before I get the point, haha. Overall, though, it was quite good!

wow...what a chilling ending! Great job of bringing out the innocence of Bobby juxtaposing the maliciousness and sadistic side of Jeremy! I think that's what was the creepiest part of the entire read! Keep up the good work and I'll be looking out for other works!

This. Was. AWESOME!

That's the creepiest thing I've ever read... very disturbed boys. Very, very disturbed. Well written, but I'm sitting here shivering in Indian summer.

i keep reviewing your stories...
but...
there's nothing wrong with them...
you're ridding me of my purpose as a reader...
but...
your tales all have good endings, and i don't mean the saccharinely sugary kind. they just...fit.
there's nothing to improve. nothing to fix. everything in your stories hits you hard and fast, but the blows are clean, well-organized, precise. perfect.

Chilling...especially the end. Good job.

Wow. Creepy. This is why you don't hit kids lol. Love the story!

The detail, the detail, the detail, I could picture it! And not in a boring descriptive way, I love how it flowed with the story. I look forward to seeing more of this, I do however think the killing part went fast, I am thinking a little more plotting on the boy's part would add more suspense, but all in all it is well written, and amazingly well =D

Freaking creepy and fantastic! Loved it!

I absolutely loved this story. Well done :D It's so sadistic in it's own way. Keep up the good work!

I've read a few of these "revenge-killin" stories on fictionpress, but I really like this one. The co-operation between the two brothers is especially good, and the way you ended the story was awesome.

Oh goodness... such morbidity! I just wonder... what could have possesed a boy to kill his mother so gruesomely? The whole scene, including Bobby, just gave shivers down my spine. I really liked it. Dark writing is really my appeal, and your tone just spoke lengths; I feel like there's something beneath the surface, something more that the reader is aching to know. It just had an overall grotesque appeal to it. Looking forward to reading more!

Wow, really creepy. Now I wish I hadn't read it at four in the morning,lol. You do a great job, never fail to creep me out.

Awesome story, a great example of what could happen if parents are cruel to their children. Write more soon, you're an awesome writer! ^_^