This one-shot is completely different from any I've read. I like the idea but I sort of don't understand the whole concept.

Your writing style is really good. I like how you describe things. :)

--Alex

This is good, Lex! I liked it a lot.

-phoebe!

I liked this a lot...great job!!

really really good. i like it so much.

I love this.

It was abit sudden. He goes from overly shy to kissing in public that quick? It's unrealistic. (by the way I'm just trying to help.)

make paragraphs. It looks as if you dont want to. And get people talking, if you don't it might seem as if this is about a sad girl. And make it longer.

hmm this is interesting, the last bit seems so out of character, your writing style is unusual, I like it

CUTE! love the clock idea! You so have to update. r/r my story too!