 fatbird33 2008-09-18 . chapter 1very beautifully written.
p.s. i heart your icon! |
 Hoodwynk 2008-06-19 . chapter 1I like the symbolism and personification. Hmm, there is aliteration, too. All these English class writing 'dos' and vocabulary. I like the tiptoes bit a lot/ 'stance' |
 Almsivi 2008-06-08 . chapter 1I like the picture that both stanzas gave me. And you really caught me off-guard by giving the tip-toes emotions. It was too vague for me to decipher the meaning, but I kind of have an idea. Overall, it was very creative and well done. |
 nothing.void.gone. 2008-06-05 . chapter 1Interesting poem. A bit unclear as to the intent of this poem, even after reading the poem's description (to me at least). Very intriguing visuals though (scalding of wooden thoughts). It provokes thought and I enjoyed that. Good poem. |
 Ventus Shadows 2008-06-05 . chapter 1Awsome! Great job with it, a litle short, but still a good job. |
 Chidori Nadare 2008-06-05 . chapter 1This is one of the most intriguing poems I've read in a while. The length itself is short, but I think that's what makes it so mysterious. The only thing that didn't makes sense to me is 'no wind' (like how are they gonna be blown if there is no wind). All in all, great job.
-C.N |
 simpleplan13 2008-06-04 . chapter 1One line really bothered me "in no wind" I just didn't understand how you would blow in no wind.
Other than that I liked it a lot because the descriptions were really great. I also like the way the last format was visually, though it might also look nice centered.
Great piece! |
 Tipped 2008-06-04 . chapter 1[review game]
i very unique way to present, it seems to me, vulnerability and fear.
really, really well written.
the only image that doesnt necessarily make sense to me is "wooden thoughts." then again, its a great image to ponder, which is always good in a poem.
i really like this :) |