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| DarkCeleste 2008-09-06 ch 4,  | abusePlease update soon. Seriously, this story is awesome. I love Raze and Marah. And Adrian, kinda. Wow, Scotland...that's far. |
| mandya1313 2008-08-24 ch 4, | abusecool story |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-08-14 ch 4, | abusethat was great. the boxers were amazing. maybe if you go back to that you could make them have some funny pattern or characters on them. like pink boxers with hearts or something funny. the clothes were amazing fun to read about. it will be really funny if her brother comes in the morning and finds them together. great work! please update again soon! |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-08-14 ch 3, | abuseyay! i was hoping he would change forms. great chapter. the pancakes were fun to read about. =] keep up the great work |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-08-13 ch 2, | abuseaww. i really like this chapter. great work with your characers and place. =] |
| atreyu love 2008-08-13 ch 4, | abuseLove the story :D and i wonder if he will start to "like" her like that. lol that would definitely be cute! PLEASE UPDATE! |
| Aqua Revolver 2008-08-12 ch 4, | abuseIt'd be funny if they got caught by her brother or Theo... Oh the joy :P Great chapter by the way! |
| Aqua Revolver 2008-08-12 ch 3, | abuseI love that hygiene comment! Wolf boy sounds ... hott to say the least... Good taste :P |
| elisefey 2008-08-12 ch 4, | abuseOh, please, please, please do not let writer's block get the best of you because I'd really like to be able to finish reading this story... |
| elisefey 2008-08-12 ch 3, | abuseWow, Adrian was creepy and slightly sexy in this chapter. ["I don't think that was very hygienic…" she murmured seriously.] - ROFTLOL! Nice cliffhanger. |
| elisefey 2008-08-12 ch 2, | abuseDon't let anyone rush your plot or guilt you into longer chapters just for the sake of longer chapters. Follow your instincts, they've proven fairly good so far. In fact, originally I was almost annoyed that she let the wolf out so early but then his attack (which I loved because I wouldn't have believed it if he had just magically trusted her already) became a way of using action to introduce the information about the chip implanted. That was very smooth and very cool. |
| elisefey 2008-08-12 ch 1, | abuseI love the set up (this world where demon pets are normal is fascinating) and the slightly disenchanted, sarcastic tone of the narrative helps build the dark reality of the story. So far I dig it. |
| tabiscus 2008-08-12 ch 4, | abuseSubway? Only in Scotland? definitely not. It's everywhere, even here in Europe and in the U.S. That would be terrible if it was; I live, quite literally, off of subway. I knew you were from somewhere around scotland or ireland as soon as you said "tea", "lass", and used the 24 hr time. I got strangely excited when you used that kind of time; I'm so used to people using American time on this site, I suppose... Anyways. I love Raze; just felt I had to throw that out there. And I'm so glad your main character isn't one of those beautiful, "i just eat and eat and don't gain a pound" mary sues. Quite refreshing, really. So. Is Malachi to be the antagonist, then? How exciting. So all I have for you is a glowing review. Terribly sorry for the lack of criticism. |
| violet-eyez 2008-08-11 ch 4, | abuseso does malachi really like her? |
| Twilight Starr 2008-08-11 ch 4, | abuse"eying"--"eyeing". There are Subways (as in the deli; not the transporation) in America. This chapter made me smile and laugh. I'm wondering if someone (like her brother) finds them in bed together. Nice work. Keep writing! ~Twilight Starr~ |