I like your use of capitalization, and the contrast of it and the rather inteligent language. I think that you could use the aging of things a bit better - liek the thible could reacur (ick, I can't spell) throughout the peice, but I do like how it's old and crumbly, and how it related to her, altough I think it could have been done more subtly.
Overall, though, a marvleous peice! I really did like it.

This just broke my heart and made that old tale feel so real. We all have to grow up sometime but it's hard to not look back on our past.

I really like the simplicity of this piece and the look inside the character of Wendy. Take care.

Obviously, you didn't follow correct capitilization, but after reading for a while I sort of liked that. The first line is a definate hook, it got me intrested. I like your diction alot; 'susurrus' 'mellifluous'. The descriptions are great, they really convey emotions well. I like how the story we know (about Peter Pan) is filled with exotic things, but your story describes things that are so plain, like linoleum. I like this sentence 'i had almost forgotten until the ivy green sound of his voice whispered, light trips of rustling melody, into my ear. playfully mocking me.' The ending is really wonderful. Great story!

This is really pretty. Usually the lack of capitalization annoys the heck out of me, but I don't mind it so much here. Maybe because it's a reflection mixed with Peter Pan? Didn't they have a sequel with Wendy's daughter as a character, or something? I've only seen the first movie. It just sounds very Wendy-like.