 Katsaya 2008-07-04 . chapter 1This was a masterpiece, and I liked how it rhymed. Oh, and even those who seem cold, quiet, or meek are normally shockingly strong. So if you are talking about yourself, I have a feeling your a lot greater than you think. |
 melbell 2008-06-06 . chapter 1this one has very nice rhyming. i like it. =] |
 maximusrexmundi 2008-06-05 . chapter 1Well as always you have created a masterpiece :) Extremely well done. I love the parallel structure and repetition, those aspects are some of my favorite ever used in poetry. And just for the record... I disagree with quite a bit of that.
"But I am weak. I am cold, quiet, and meek."
Maybe it is just me misjudging people again, but that is NOT the person I see. Weak? ... you got to be kidding. Cold? dont make me laugh. Quiet? Maybe, but not overly so. You seem to be one to say it if it needs to be said. Meek? Well quite frankly I dont think there is anything wrong with that if it is not excessive, which I dont find you to be. :D so no, I disagree. |
 .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-06-05 . chapter 1Well, dear, I think that you're missing the fact that in your quietness, meekness, and coldness... you have an inner strength. Even though you may not be able to say everything you think and everything that you feel, you can write it and be true to yourself. Trust me dear, the people that constantly speak their minds are the ones that people tend not to like--they're boistrous, annoying, and too self-centered to see anyone else's views.
This was beautiful, and it's very touching that you mentioned your mom's funeral and eulogy. I can't remember the eulogy for my mom's dad, I was only in third grade and the funeral is a blur. For my dad's dad, though, I don't think there was a eulogy. Your mom sounds like a great person--you should be PROUD that you've been compared to her, and don't be so humble all the time. I didn't know her, and I surely don't know you, but from the conversations/messages we've shared, you've sounded plenty strong to me.
And guess what? It's summer! =]
-stix- |
|