very well written! but it doesnt seem as raw as some of the others.

is this based on experience?

Yo dis poem is so hot!

Niceness! Reminds me of one of my own. I love the ryhme scheme and wouldn't change the words a bit.

I like the conflicting feelings in this poem, but you sacrifice a lot of some great metaphors and such to make it rhyme. Your rhythm is a bit off in some lines; be sure to check it. Listen to it in your head, read it thoroughly so the lines tend to jump off each other. I did like the "shoved against a wall" image. It really stuck.

Keep it up. This is actually a very clever, though indecisive poem with plenty of great qualities.

the love and hatred mixing brings the poem strong emotions.

this was so sad... it made me cry, and titanic doesn't make me cry.

Very nice, again. One tip: for "But really it’s just a lie" I think (and this is only my opinion) that the rhythm would flow better if it was "But it’s really just a lie"

very powerful. i really enjoyed reading this. beautiful in a sick way.

~rira-chan

p.s thank you so much for your review!

Wow, this is good! I love you writign style, did this really happen? I mean if it did, I hope you got through it ok. If it didn't, you got the emotion so right.

not sure what to say about it.. its good. really hard hitting.