This was truly such an amazing piece- it drew me in because I could relate to it emotionally based on my life, but I believe that even someone who hasn't felt quite this way would be able to connect with this piece because you've really captured the distant, sorrowful sensation of feeling completely alone. It's really good.

It's like these words are a perfect depiction of my thoughts. It could not sound any more familiar if I had written it myself. I guess that is a reason to feel some comfort, because it proves I'm not truly alone if you, a stranger can write how I feel. AMAZING!

This is beautiful! I know the feelings that you are describing all too well, but never before have I heard someone put those feelings into words like you have. Like others have mentioned, the repetition of the first line emphasizes your point and makes the poem stronger, and every stanza has its own subject, but it all flows very well. Thank you for putting those feelings into words.
~Amanda

ps-Thanks for the review. :)

Thanks for your review awhile back. Sorry it took so long to return the favor.

I think some of the rhyming and phrasing seemed a bit off, so I didn't like that. I did like the repetition though, it worked nice to create a flow. The only thing is it made every stanza a question so I think you should add a question mark to the end of each stanza. I really liked the italics on the word feel, it was a great word to emphasize and I think it added a lot to the line.

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That's a great poem! You picked out great ways to word everything.

usually when people are just so straightforward about thier poetry, i critic them in a bad way.
but i really cant deny your talent, no matter how straightforward and cliche the subject could have turned into.
great job, i hope to read more of your work someday.

--sv

Good poem. I especially liked "Have you ever felt so alone
That your only friends are dreams And even then, you still know that You’re alone among other things" and the second last stanza. The structure is good but its the emotiveness of this piece that I like the best. Good job.

God, that first part was hauntingly familiar, I went through that a couple months ago. You captured that feeling perfectly, kudos to you.

This poem is very sad, dark, and intense. I read your profile, and I know you said you wanted constructive criticism, but here are the only real criticisms I have:
a) onlooking should be one word
b) with the rhyming, the only rhyme I'm not sure completely works is dreams/things.
c) the meter is slightly inconsistent in a few places and interrupts the smooth flow of the poem a little bit

I struggle with the meter when I write rhyming poems (one of the reasons free verse poetry is my friend), so I feel weird for pointing that one out in someone else's writing, lol.

Fortunately, the positive greatly outweighs the negative ;D
Through the sadness in this poem, there is a strange beauty that is hard to describe. This poem had a very strong impact on me; you were incredibly effective with expressing the emotions clearly; your message and meaning are both made very clear. You painted a very vivid picture with your words.

One of the parts that hit me the most strongly was "Have you ever felt so alone/That your only friends are dreams". This struck me as a very unique and descriptive line. I think it's my favourite line of the poem. I love it

Unforgettably-Uniquely Me,
Beautiful job with this. I really like your writing.
~liz

Wow. That's sad. Very nice writing.

I've felt all those things and it's horrible but this poem is good even if it's a bit dark.

I like this. The repeated first line in each stanza just adds emphasis just right here.

This poem made good use of the different rhyme schemes offer, but you still need to keep the meter consistent. I noticed this firstly in the opening stanza, and found other lighter errors of such throughout. Try to keep the rhythm consistent and the meter fluid. The rhymes and word choices were great, albeit a bit bland (add some descriptions to fix this), but you need to keep an eye on the meter.

Other than that, this was a relatively smooth poem, especially near the end, which I thought was excellent. However, try to keep the rhythm a bit more fluid. Good job, overall.

good poem! i liked the repetition and rhyming