Reviews for Heart Lotion SPF 20
wyant14 6/13/13 . chapter 26
Holy guacamole! This chapter was amazing. I really never liked Gabe and the last line just kind of made me happy. Such awesomeness!
tigger 6/13/13 . chapter 26
okay I love this story and went past theses chapters in the past few days and your writing style is spectacular and Honey is a great character because she's so out there and Adam is a great male interest too but not sp much as uniquely characterized as Honey. but what can you do? *shrug*

ok but the main part in the review is I AM SO CONFUSED. Like if Honey dies than Adam lives apparently and I do not have a clue why since Adam was supposed to be immortal and how would he die if Honey lives? the thing with supernatural genre is that it gets confusing sp I don't blame you...
isabelleflorendo 6/4/13 . chapter 26
Please please update :)
Meow X 5/15/13 . chapter 26
I REALLY love this story! I'm so excited and upset at the same time that's its gonna be over soon!
I love the detail you give and how it's never too much! (I think I mentioned that in one of my other reviews) this chapter made me feel so bad for Jesse! Ugh. I love all your characters so much and I FEEL their emotions. Just goes to show what a great writer you are.
I loved how there was a bit of humour in the chapter too! "Does he have an off button?" That gave me a good laugh haha!
What I particularly like about this story overall is that it isn't at all predictable like most stories are!
I can't seem to figure out whether everything's going to end up happily, or if I'm gonna end up wanting to ball my eyes out.
As always, great work!
MT 5/15/13 . chapter 26
I have no words for how incredible this story is. The first chapter I was confused out of my mind, but I kept thinking ''It's gonna get clearer, it has to, I mean this story has over 2000 rewievs!'' And after things started getting clearer, I was hooked. And I'm not really interested in the supernatural, but this world you created is something else.

I absolutely love Honey, her faults and all. She has really grown during those months. And is it sad that I have a crush on Adam? Cause then I'll just admit to being sad right now.

Please, please, please update soon! I will check for an update every day from now on xD So glad I found this story! Thank you for writing it! I truly hope they get a happy ending. Not bittersweet, just plain happy. Pretty please?
FreyWa11ace 5/11/13 . chapter 18
"Oh, Stefan!" She took one of his hands, a dreamlike wonder on her face. "When you get the chance, you should tell Adam to kiss you, too. It is heavenly."

Heart Lotion SPF 20 is absolutely comical, complicated, and well thought out. Well Done.
Life Love Sanity 5/10/13 . chapter 26
Oh my goodness! Just read it all, it is so good. But I am so confused! Is Gabe going to die too? Will Honey and Adam ever get to be together? Ahhh can't wait to find out!
emeraldmyst 5/7/13 . chapter 26
Wow. You've literally got me on the edge of my metaphorical seat waiting for the next installment. I'll admit that the prologue near dissuaded me from continuing because it was so shallow, but now? Now I'm in love with your story.
September 16th 4/20/13 . chapter 26
I read this last night and I'm so happy that it's progressing. Congratulations on your graduation! I can't wait for the next chapter! Aaahhh update!
Kaitlyn.Marie 4/15/13 . chapter 26
Ack. I really don't like Eve, even if she is a tiny bit relatable.

Are you going to turn this into a series? I'd love to see the woman that knocks Gabe on his ass! I'm not sure I like him either, especially with his emotionless-ness. I mean, yeah, seeing visions and deaths and whatever he sees is mind-consuming and has to be draining. But that doesn't give him reason to be such a jackass about it. Life happens, and even immortal beings have an expiration date.

I love the chemistry with Adam and Honey, especially when they do the energy transfer thing and are so very connected afterwards. It makes me disappointed this isn't rated M. I do love my smut.

You have me wondering if Honey is going to take Eve's offer, going off that last line... So hurry up and post :P

Hope you're well and not dealing with depressing weather as I am in Michigan, USA. Congratulations on your graduation!
moonliteroses394 4/13/13 . chapter 26
I just read this today but wow this was pretty amazing _ I love your writing. Its quirky and funny and I laughed aloud in public while reading the first couple of chapters. Can't wait for the next update ! Thanks for being so dedicated (:
French Pop 4/12/13 . chapter 26
Hey! So I started reading this story like three years ago and completely forgot about it until a friend redirected me back to it. Now that I've caught up on it, I'm so glad you kept writing it! It's really turned out beautifully. I know it's not over yet, but so far it's unraveling very well.

First, I love that I'm able to love and hate something about all of your characters. Especially Eve, who is supposed to be the sort of villain in the story. I love feeling conflicted about characters in a story because it makes the story infinitely more interesting.

Secondly, in this kind of story, it usually requires a willing suspension of disbelief. It's not easy to pull off a story that makes it easy for the reader to do this, but I think you've done a good job of that.

Lastly, I can't wait to see how this story ends up! I'm sure it'll be great! :)
MileyRowling 4/9/13 . chapter 26
Great story! Can't wait for more!
MissNightOwl 4/8/13 . chapter 26
This story is just so much more serious and meaningful at times than the title leads one to believe XD
Midnightamant 4/6/13 . chapter 26
Hello!

Okay, so I came across your story two days ago, and now I'm caught up! Your style of writing just slows so well, and I just couldn't stop reading : )

I really liked the name of this chapter – all of the names of the chapters were very fitting, and as an English major, the quotes that precede the chapter are amazing. When I read, good narrative normally plays like a movie in my head, and I could certainly see in my head what was happening, so that’s great!

One punctuation error that I saw – “He didn't know how one recovered from that kind of grief, but he suppressed the urge (to) apologize” – the word in brackets is the one you need to add.

The scene with Louisa and Gabe just broke my heart. I think it was the whole “referring to oneself in the third person” thing that totally made my heart melt. It was that, in addition to the whole “Louisa-is-dying-and-Gabe-is-letting-it-happen” thing that ultimately made my heart nothing but a puddle.

I love this story, so I don’t want it to end, but I want to thank you for writing this as well as posting it for others to read.

Keep Writing,
Midnightamant

P.S. – I am also writing a story on FictionPress; it is called “A Date Gone to Hell” – If you have the time to check it out at some point, I would really appreciate it!
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