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| Militant Poet 2008-07-14 ch 1,  | abuseI enjoyed this, it was very natural :) |
| Hopeless-and-helpless01 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseThat is really sad. It held my attention the way that the poem was set out. It was different to what I have been used to seeing. Very nice. KW, Dani |
| Lady Fingers 2008-06-17 ch 1, | abusei cast anchor against your shadow to sit inside myself alone dont let the words leave you like they are leaving me someone gave you something kid |
| simpleplan13 2008-06-14 ch 1, | abuseI love all the descriptions because they are amazing as always. I also love how focus on your tongue and split up the words because that was really interesting and unique. I liked the italics for the most part. I didn't like the one in the beginning because the rest seemed more connected. Also twice you just italicized wither and one time you did "I wither" that seemed odd to me. Other than that I really liked it. PS. If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile) |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-06-08 ch 1, | abuseOh, that is lovely. I love how original you made it and how you it is; you must really have it bad for this girl. I just can't get beyond the total coincidence of her name. I think I told you the story before, but I had a rather . . . confusing time a few months ago with a girl with the same name. Just crazy. Your line breaks are pretty stellar; I think my favorite might be, "i love/the way my name rolls off your tongue," as simple as it is. It just works. And then I love the sound of, "'you' a casual reference point." Just another one of those things that just works. Gah. This review is me trying to get back into some form of artistic mind. I didn't really get a chance to write at all yesterday, so I'm trying to channel my creativity again. Anyway. Fabulous work, as always. Keep writing! :) |
| Almsivi 2008-06-07 ch 1, | abuseThere's so much creative imagery in here, like "my tongue/the floppy sponge/recoils" that I've never seen anywhere else! Congrats for taking an overdone subject and making it into something fresh and new. |
| Scarlett Wynter 2008-06-07 ch 1, | abusethe title of this caught my eye b/c it's a name of a song I like by Nightwish :) Great poem, seriously. I love how you describe saying the words "I love you." |