You have a really nice story here! I can't believe it hasn't recieved much reviewing. I'll have to leave one. You had a nice first chapter. When I first opened it, it seemed like it was a little too long, but, as I read through, it seemed like the majority of the detail (and I'm a detail lover) was necessary. You gave just enough information to keep he reader interested, and it seems like even more of Jade's history will unfold in later chapters.

You captured the accent of the elders very well and your vocabulary helped complement that (Ex=Calling the shovel and spade). Nice job. ^^

You might want to consider changing your title a bit so that it's a little more interesting. I think it might lure in more readers.

Overall, excellent job! I'll be sure to read on!