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Reviews For: The Raincoat

sunscraped. 2008-08-01 ch 1,	abuseI'm not a fan of religious poems, but here it's more of a philosophy than religion. I guess what confused me most was the extended metaphor you chose, or rather the pool of ideas from which you chose your metaphors don't always have a lot in common. I understood the connection between rain and tidal waves, but I got confused once a cup of coffee entered that pool. I don't know; it somewhat went over my head. the only thing I don't like about this poem is the cliche you used. I think you have more than enough talent to come up with something better. :) -ss.
Bernita Bean 2008-07-13 ch 1,	abuseLove it. Absolutely just...love it. I wish I could explain in so many words why this touches me, but I can't, not really. It's just beautiful. ~ Nita
Eve's Deception 2008-07-10 ch 1,	abusebeautiful. and i must say i agree with miss lady fingers, she's such a peach isnt she? you came recommended and i was not disappointed. from first line to lsat last verse i was captivated by the hope that encased this piece, almost felt like you were holding it tightly in your fist, thrusting it at us and demanding we too believe. i must admit, you had me convinced. the enormity of this piece is almost overwhelming but you manage to pull it off and make each verse like a new breath, inhale in desperation to understand. i dunno. kinda blew my mind. kinda like it a lot
Lady Fingers 2008-06-17 ch 1,	abusebeautiful i have one reccomendation they just hold their ground and so we must learn to hold our ground instead of saying and so we must learn to hold our ground i would put: and so we learn to hold ours i dont know, it sounds smoother when reading it
simpleplan13 2008-06-09 ch 1,	abuse"to be angry than me"" I dunno if its just my computer but there were weird boxes after that line The piece is really great as always. It flows well and the descriptions of everything are really great. The only thing is you repeated some of the words like before a lot, which I wasn't a big fan of. Other than that really great job.
Scarlett Wynter 2008-06-08 ch 1,	abuseargh. I got teary eyed reading this. smacks self in head for being so emotional I don't even know why, perhaps it's because I could relate. Anyway, great poem, I loved the metaphor. keep writing. :)
she smolders 2008-06-08 ch 1,	abuseSomething's changed, hasn't it? I can see a lot of growth in this and maturity. It's so hard to move on when you have been holding on to something or someone for a long time. It becomes such a constant in your life that it really does hurt when you let go. But you really do have to free the things you love and all that. Reading this reminds me of the person I was a year ago. I had all these choices to make and I was crying a lot more than usual and just felt confused about a lot of things. Like in the end of your poem I moved on, took the time to clear my head. "and so we must learn to hold/our ground/like water/without wearing our raincoats" I like this part the most, standing in the rain does make me feel stronger now. There's a lot more I could say but I don't want my sentiments to sound generic, so take care.

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