Your summary sucks. Instead of making excuses, put an actual description of your story on it so people KNOW if your work matches the preferences of your readers.

Wow...
Much less confusing than before and i can't wait to get to the next chapter (i only have...16 more chapters to read...Time to cram!)

You, K.M. Star, are the queen of ellipses. Please retire the three dots, especially in the 1st chapter.

One period is fine at the end of a sentence.

Vile man! *glowers* EVIL CLIFFIE! EBIL (LOVERLY) GUY WHO WROTE IT!

Update... or DIE. Rawr.

Ok i found it WAY confusing...
I get that you're changing povs often, so, to lessen the confusion of the reader (aka my school-deprived-because-its-summer mind) have something like:
Chapter 4
Kevin
or something like that, if it makes any sense. I've seen it done in a ton of other books...i just completely forget which...
um anyways... So far the story is going great, i read the past chapters a LONG time ago, but apparently forgot to review (shuns self somehow). I know, wicked mean to forget something like that, and i'm so sorry.
I'll continue reading it tomorrow because i need to get to bed at the moment!! So, yeah...
With the acception of this chapter, it was amazing (i just found this chapter confusing...incredibly confusing becuase i also couldn't tell when you were changing povs and stuff)...But, thinking back to it, if i were to reread it, i think i would get it. So yeah...my long rant and rave of a review...Can't wait to read the next chapter (and slowly make my way to the last posted chapter...i have a llong way to go...)

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I wasn't expecting Keran, you know.

I'll kill you later, Kevin. I'll get you and kill you later, once I have internet back.

:D Watch your virtual back, love!

I'd hurt you, but it's not my character. :D Have fun torturing Toe Heret!

>I'll hurt you if you hurt Becky!<

Be quiet, Helen.

>No.

XDXDXD

“For my own safety, I must agree with the stunning red head in the background.”

^^ Wrong lady to be hitting on, Walts m'dear! :D Yes, I lurve it. And you.

Keep up the insanity!

AND USE MORE {name} SAID! I IS CONFUSED!

Becky is amused. Helen is not. I'm laughing my head off until Helen hits me with a book.

LAWLS. Poor sod... XDXDXD Can't see any OOCness here, so carry on!

The ending was a bit confusing but i can't wait to read on!!

Poor sod... :D She does get what she wants in the end, though... release. Hmm.

YE gawds.

...

NO.

NO WAY. NO WAY, NO HOW.

Hey, wanna do DG, Star Wars style?