LadyRini478
2008-06-08
ch 1,  | abuseThis poem was a great rough draft. There's a few grammatical errors, and a couple of punctuation things that I would change. Free style poetry can be even harder to accomplish than poetry with a set rhyming scheme, the trick is learning how to let the words roll smoothly. Watch the amount if "I"s in your poetry, even if you are speaking first person, sometimes it can be distracting. As I said, this is a great beginning piece, and with a little work, you could really make this poem absolutely astounding. |
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