I really like the last line.

Hmm... I like, no, love it. You could've made it so much longer though. ;) My favorite line must be, "as fatigue sweeps in wet-red waves around her." Nice work.

good poem!

Sad... Quite, quite sad... Great work with the atmosphere _

Wow, this is really good.

"pumping it's sustenance heatedly into cool air"

Nice detail and nice use of imagery. This is really good. Nice work.