Well, interesting chapter here. I'm not too sure if this is a transitional chapter of a chapter that's meant to forward the plot though. I'm actually guessing that Astor's ritual might not have been ended up in failure. For some weird reason, I think he might have expected things to happen. As for the part on the dreamscape or maybe even it could be a pseudo version, well it seems that the whole thing will have a major part in the plot although I just can't put my finger in guessing how. The rest of the chapter afterwards quite frankly seems like a filler to me. But those dudes' agenda here might have a paving-the-path effect on the main plot since I can see for sure that it has not been started in the entirety yet. ;) Anyway, glad to see that you're back up here. Hope to see your reviews for The Eternal Grail soon. I think you owed me quite a number of reviews here lol! :D

P.S: Just checked back and found out that you've stopped at the omake chapter. So all you have to do is to progess from there. But maybe you will want to do a brief reading of the previous chapters though to refresh your memory. :)

Oh goodness I feel really sorry for her and disturbed by what seems to have been done to her.
Can't wait for the next chapter, I hope things get better for her.

Why do you have to leave such a cliff hanger
Your story is really really awesome plz update really soon

Not a bad little chapter, but Edith's outburst seems a bit childish. I know she's terrified, but she could act in a slightly more dignified matter. You could show her terror in more than just her foot stomping, etc. She could feel herself trembling and be fighting the urge to break and shout these things, but instead she tries to calmly demand why and tries to hold herself together. She might ultimately break, but it could be a little bit more age appropriate. She could collapse to the ground in tears maybe finally beg a bit, etc. Just a thought.

Wow, now that I've seen this chapter, I sort of think necromancer lol! :D Anyway, I like the way you did the details here although this chapter is pretty short. With that being said though, I'm curious to see where this one will go in the aspect of romance since I've seen virtually nil here up till now. And any clue to why you used the term wolf in your title? If you don't want any spoiler, that's alright. You don't have to tell me. :) If there's any CC I can give, it will be that maybe you can build up on the atmosphere where Edith met Astor. Maybe something more sophisticated like a feeling of dread at meeting him at the first glance or maybe something along that line. Man my brain is seriously impaired by the insane heat here. Don't know why there's this retarded heatwave going on in S'pore now. Must be the fault of US, China and India combined. :S

I love your story so far. I can't believe he want to take her soul. Is that the reason they captured her in the first place? I really hope Astor fails.
Please, please update soon - I can't wait to read more and find out where your story is going.

No! I left such a great review and it got deleted! D: I'm so mad right now! Ergh! Okay, go look through the commas, some of them are unneccessary.

"Insight" should be "incite"

"too and fro" To

Uhm, yeah, and really creepy guy Astor is. Knowing that he's going to take Edith's soul really adds a twist to the plot. Aah, I'm just so mad. It was such a great review, but I don't have time to rewrite it...Well, sorry this wasn't better, but here you go anyway.

Velvet.

Love it! This is a nice change from a lot of the romance stories written here on fictionpress, I myself have tried my hand at writing modern and not-so-modern stories and I know that even if the story is just as good it doesn't seem to get many reviews but this story is great!
I did notice that you've beenn working on it for almost a year and only 5 chapters? what's up with that? Anyways, I hope that you update soon, I can't wait to see what is going to happen next!

I just read your profile and I must say I totally agree with what you said about reviews. I take forever to write a review as well. Oh you don't have to review back if you are not comfortable with my stories. I don't really mind *smile*

Off I go:

Oh already the name Edith captured my attention. I love original names.

Wow that is one effective way to wake someone... burying her with snow. Nice one.

Her straight hair and black eyes were enough to rob any man of his wits. Had she not been born a maid, Edith was sure that Lydia would have had all of the suitors this side of the Galere mountains courting her.
(wow, I like the last thing. I am in awe)

Poor Edith. I never like arranged marriage.

“I feel selfish for waking you to unload all of my problems on you,” she, hastily, tried to stand but Lydia's hand gripped hers firmly.

“You forget, that I too have an intended. I share your fears. Trust your fate, you never know what it will bring you way.”
(They are such good friends. *smile* Friendship sure is a powerful bond)

What a cliffhanger ending! Nice start.

Very interesting chapter. So now I have to wonder, was it Edith who brought out the memories? And how? I guess I'll have to wait and see. It's good that it gives some insight into Edith's character and a bit of why she tries to be so strong. A bit more about her past might be nice, but you could always keep it for a little later. Otherwise, there are just some little mistakes here and there that you can wipe out with some editing.

A nice chapter. They are a good length I think. You said that she broke her wrist, but if so, she might be in more pain from that than she is hungry. It could be a sprain or something less severe but still painful.

I have to go make dinner, but I'll get the last chapter reviewed in a little while (while it's cooking).

The beginning is a bit anticlimactic. At the end of chapter one, you are expecting someone to be standing outside their tent or something. I'm also a bit confused about them being able to see everything going on outside the tent when they are inside. And then Lydia goes from yelling to yawning in a very short time. And how did they go from the servant tent to her tent?

I was going to say that men should have been posted outside her tent, but I guess if the commander was after her, he wouldn't be so intent on her safety. Another good ending. I guess I'll see where it leads!

At first, Edith didn't strike me as the noble type. It almost seemed like she was there to do harm. Obviously those guards aren't very good. I say she chops off their heads and gets some new ones!

Yay! Too tell you the truth, I had to read the last chapter to be less confused, cause I forgot a lot of stuff. ;P But it was a rather good chapter. I don't know how many people have already pointed out the mistakes, but if you ever get the chance, proof read this.

Uhm, well, Edith had a terrible childhood now, didn't she? I was surprised. But even more surprised to learn of Evaun's interesting powers. I wonder who he really works for and if he's going to take Edith with him. Good work, just proof read it later. :D

Velvet.

Herro there! me again if ya remember. :) Anyway, glad to be back reviewing you again. :) Okay, I can say that this is an interesting chapter in terms of Edith's character and what could she be possibly capable of. Only thing I feel that you can improve is that you could have done more in her past insight. Whatever the scenes from the past here seems to be lacking a bit in details. Especially the case of her father. You only did a couple or so sentences on it where in fact, I feel you can expand on that. Apart from that, nothing much to say. And yeah, thanks very much for your review on Seal of Valor. Hope to see more of it soon! ^^ Bye!:)