|Reviews for I fedeli The faithful|
| songbirdalice 2/27/09 . chapter 1
Very good! I like Alesio.
| Jasmine kay 2/1/09 . chapter 4
I really liked it but you might want to review this chap there are a few grammar errors here and there.
| Tatianolishka 1/22/09 . chapter 4
YES! YOU STAYED IN CHARACTER! I was apprehensive when you showed me the first bit, but the last paragraph did the job of explaining his actiions and feelings. Very. Well. Done.
| Zina Nevirone 1/16/09 . chapter 4
| J.A. Fletcher 12/3/08 . chapter 3
Pretty good story, Lee. I like Alesio. And you don't have too many mistakes, which is good. When are you gonna continue it?
| Danielle Thamasa 8/27/08 . chapter 3
I offered to make her diner at my place
-diner should be dinner
“Hey kid come ‘ear I got a job for ya.”
-'ear should be 'ere
This is really nice so far. I especially loved Carina and Alesio discussing books. It was highly amusing. I can't wait to see where this goes next.
| Danielle Thamasa 8/27/08 . chapter 2
Alesio figured the Don was an avoid reader.
-I think you mean avid, not avoid.
Alesio, the son of a restaurant owner who felt it important to know his new nation’s langue,...
-I think you mean language, not langue
By that time my second oldest brother was eighteen and my mother had died so I not fear leaving.
-missing a word between I and not.
Otherwise good job with more character development. The dialogue mostly stays with the time, in language and slang they would have used. I look forward to reading more.
| DaCivilWarBear 8/19/08 . chapter 3
Another good chapter! I think Alesio needs to take girl lessons from Lee. XD
| DaCivilWarBear 8/19/08 . chapter 2
Good job, again, Lee! The spelling/grammar mistakes were really, really minimal. Good work!
| DaCivilWarBear 8/19/08 . chapter 1
Nice, Lee! I got really into the action, despite the gore...keep it up!
| Rogue-writer-16 7/31/08 . chapter 3
Oh! So the femme fatale is introduced? Lol. Just kidding. Sounds like she'll be quite the character... and poor Al... he's so shy :D Keep on writing, tis much interest!
| Zina Nevirone 7/31/08 . chapter 3
Carina sounds amazing!
diner :- dinner...
all I could see...
loveage you and this!
| Tatianolishka 7/19/08 . chapter 3
Just one thing though - I don't work with 20's-70's history, so you'll have to enlighten me. Did they really have taxis back then?
Other than that... *thud*
| Scottish Princess 6/21/08 . chapter 2
Great two chapters so far. Not really my type of story, but I thought it was good. Well-written. Others have already mentioned the spelling errors I found, so I'll just leave it at that.
Keep it up, Lee.
| Zina Nevirone 6/18/08 . chapter 1
langue - language
avoid - avid
couldn't bear it to read the first chap again, too gory...