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| Reviews for I fedeli The faithful |
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   songbirdalice 2/27/09 . chapter 1Very good! I like Alesio. |
| Jasmine kay 2/1/09 . chapter 4 I really liked it but you might want to review this chap there are a few grammar errors here and there. |
| Tatianolishka 1/22/09 . chapter 4 YES! YOU STAYED IN CHARACTER! I was apprehensive when you showed me the first bit, but the last paragraph did the job of explaining his actiions and feelings. Very. Well. Done. |
| Zina Nevirone 1/16/09 . chapter 4 WOW... |
| J.A. Fletcher 12/3/08 . chapter 3 Pretty good story, Lee. I like Alesio. And you don't have too many mistakes, which is good. When are you gonna continue it? |
| Danielle Thamasa 8/27/08 . chapter 3 I offered to make her diner at my place -diner should be dinner “Hey kid come ‘ear I got a job for ya.” -'ear should be 'ere This is really nice so far. I especially loved Carina and Alesio discussing books. It was highly amusing. I can't wait to see where this goes next. Danielle Thamasa |
| Danielle Thamasa 8/27/08 . chapter 2 Alesio figured the Don was an avoid reader. -I think you mean avid, not avoid. Alesio, the son of a restaurant owner who felt it important to know his new nation’s langue,... -I think you mean language, not langue By that time my second oldest brother was eighteen and my mother had died so I not fear leaving. -missing a word between I and not. Otherwise good job with more character development. The dialogue mostly stays with the time, in language and slang they would have used. I look forward to reading more. Danielle Thamasa |
| DaCivilWarBear 8/19/08 . chapter 3 Another good chapter! I think Alesio needs to take girl lessons from Lee. XD |
| DaCivilWarBear 8/19/08 . chapter 2 Good job, again, Lee! The spelling/grammar mistakes were really, really minimal. Good work! |
| DaCivilWarBear 8/19/08 . chapter 1 *reviews* Nice, Lee! I got really into the action, despite the gore...keep it up! |
| Rogue-writer-16 7/31/08 . chapter 3 Oh! So the femme fatale is introduced? Lol. Just kidding. Sounds like she'll be quite the character... and poor Al... he's so shy :D Keep on writing, tis much interest! Rogue. |
| Zina Nevirone 7/31/08 . chapter 3 Carina sounds amazing! lolz diner :- dinner... all I could see... loveage you and this! |
| Tatianolishka 7/19/08 . chapter 3 *worships* Wow. Just one thing though - I don't work with 20's-70's history, so you'll have to enlighten me. Did they really have taxis back then? Other than that... *thud* |
| Scottish Princess 6/21/08 . chapter 2 Great two chapters so far. Not really my type of story, but I thought it was good. Well-written. Others have already mentioned the spelling errors I found, so I'll just leave it at that. Keep it up, Lee. Anna |
| Zina Nevirone 6/18/08 . chapter 1 langue - language avoid - avid couldn't bear it to read the first chap again, too gory... |
