Woow this story has such a different feel from your other ones, but I really like it! I like the way you handled a moderny (or was it near-future?) urban setting, and it seemed realistic, but had that sense of mystery/science fiction too. I liked how easy it was to relate to the reader, and I also like how your writing has a bit of that story-telling feel-- it's pleasant to read and has a good flow. I'm really glad you wrote this! This reeks of a strong planning and a thoroughly created setting. I wanna know what happens next!

Ok...hm...I'll keep this review more brief since I'm gonna talk to you about it in person.

Interesting start. I am more curious about your creation of the Nothing People; that is a concept that I haven't heard of before, so intriguing creation there. Your writing style actually hasn't changed that much; the undertones of your style is still there, or perhaps it's because I haven't read your creative writings in awhile. Not that it's a bad thing; if writers fluctuate their voices too much it leads to forced writing practices.

Keep going at it, I see some potential here and I'll keep reading it, cause you know you're awshum! ^_^

Wow! An interesting and captivating story. When will I be able to read the next chapter.

Your writing has improved a lot.