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| Starfire17 2008-07-19 ch 1,  | abuseWow I loved this. The imagery was absolutely beautiful and it was written well as well. Excellent job! |
| simpleplan13 2008-07-02 ch 1, | abuse"of reds and oranges and browns"... I would say "reds, oranges and browns" just to make it less wordy "The figure pausing for a moment, dips their fingers" I know you probably don't want the reader to know if it's a male or female, but their is plural so it should be his/her or even it maybe. This applies to the they in the paragraph as well. "but which now" you just used the word which and I don't think you really need it. "itself in it’s stones"...its I like this... your descriptions are really beautiful & I like them a lot. You can picture them and they're not overused. Well done. |
| kloun doll 2008-07-02 ch 1, | abusethe imagery is very peaceful. |
| Looking for Bliss 2008-06-28 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, simply beautiful. You can picture your self there and see it exactly as it is. A wonderful descrption... |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-23 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful job at painting a picture and description. Lovely work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| E.J. Teine 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abuseVery nice! Vividly written, nice attention to detail. I could totally see this place in my head... |