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| Frenchie-chan 2008-06-22 ch 1,  | abuse"I fell for you You didn't catch me." Wow...words cannot describe... I could praise this word choice all day and it still woudn't measure up! Amaxing. Utterly incredible. Purrs, Frenchie-chan |
| Chidori Nadare 2008-06-21 ch 1, | abuseThis left me feeling nostalgic. Also, I like how you used that word. I don't read much poems with the word nostalgic/nostalgia in that context. I have no idea why the line stop me is in quotation marks. There's also some parts that need punctuations. Other than that, this is a really good poem. Good job. -C.N |
| Random Word Artist 2008-06-20 ch 1, | abuseSad...mysterious...deep...intruiging...and I spelled that wrong, didn't I? |
| emmaliefje 2008-06-18 ch 1, | abuseHello! Thought I'd return the favor and review one of your poems! I like this. It's sweet and sad. I like the "stop me" put in there. It's very pretty. Well done! |
| Exuberant Lemon 2008-06-17 ch 1, | abuseThis is very nice. I like that you can convey many different feelings from this. |
| x day x dreamer x 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abusei like this, it really gives new meaning to the word fall. "nostalgic". interesting word. not used often. ;) kudos on that alone. using interesting & uncommon words is always a bonus point. lol. ~srz |
| fleur de l'est 2008-06-14 ch 1, | abuseOK I'll get on thing outta the way: I think the "too low to be listened" bit should be "too low to be heard" ^^ Otherwise, great use of pun, works really well, and striking last line! Excellen poem :D ~fleur |
| fatbird33 2008-06-13 ch 1, anon. | abuse"nostalgic " nice word. and i really like the last line. |
| WritesWithPoisonInkAndBlood 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abuseThis is very good, I like it, especially the meaning behind it x |
| Galadh Niniel 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, I love the puns with the double meanings of "fall". |
| Unforgettably-Uniquely Me 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abuseI like the bases for this poem. I especiall like the last two lines I fell for you you didn't catch me. It all seemed a little choppy, but the point of it and the parts that did flow were very good. Nice work. |
| Nonya Soum 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. You made every feeling associated with the word "fall" come to life. An image of a leaf even came to mind. I think my favorite aspect of this poem is how short it is for how many different feelings and images it shows. That's great! Beautiful poem! Write on! |
| XxXKristie marieXxX 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good! The last two lines remind me of someone of my past. Nice job! XKristie MarieX |
| AK the Twilight 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abuseThough I'm not a fan of short poetry, I can catch the gist of this one's deep meaning rather well. Its subject matter is accessible, though deep enough to represent something great. The final two lines are excellent and emphasis-proving, although I found the first stanza to be a bit off when compared to the rest. It's not your best, and has moments of being too brief and succinct in its meanings, but I enjoyed reading this. Good job. |
| simpleplan13 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abuseNot sure why stop me is in quotes. Also you need some punctuation in that stanza. Other than that I liked it. The descriptions were nice. |