|Reviews for Sister of Light|
| Harmonic Discord 6/15/08 . chapter 1
Straight from the Review marathon (link in profile)
I feel like you change tense somewhere in the middle of the poem with "she wore a crown" which kind of threw me off.
I really liked the imagery - very vivid. I think you could extend the poem a little more, perhaps - because I was a little confused... why did the mermaid talk to the narrator? Was she supposed to be some kind of goddess? I've heard the moon being called a guide, but never a mermaid. Is this supposed to relate to a specific piece of mythology? Please, enlighten me if I'm missing something...
It fell around her is waves and curls - I think "is" should be "in"
| flyingninjas11 6/12/08 . chapter 1
This is a beautiful piece of writing and you should be proud of yourself. I really like it. Keep up the good work!
| LadyRini478 6/12/08 . chapter 1
What a beautiful poem, the imagery was so mesmerizing! I really enjoyed it! Your pace was very smooth and it flowed well. Wonderful work!