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| Thoughtful Silence 2008-07-09 ch 1,  | abuseThis was good. I loved the format (and, by the by, despite what another reviewer said, I get why you put this in the 'haiku' category. I've always felt there should be a tanka category.) Anyways, I loved the line 'she is the static' it was refreshingly original, and I loved the ominous concept of how 'she' is always there. I liked the last line being by itself. Good job! -Thoughtful |
| painted eyes 2008-07-09 ch 1, | abuseExcellent use of the tanka format. I loved the imagery throughout this. I loved the line 'she is the static'. What gave you the idea to write this poem? I'm just curious 'tis all! =) Keep up the good work! |
| kloun doll 2008-06-18 ch 1, | abuseit's as if she was left and now she's angry for that. it's a heartfelt piece. |
| simpleplan13 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abuseNot sure why you put this in haiku category 'cause it's not. I think you should change that. I did like the piece though, your descriptions of here were really great, especially in the second stanza. I also like the last line, very creepy. PS if you’re bored, check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile) |
| RaindropsOnBlackRoses 2008-06-14 ch 1, | abusevery dark and depressing but still good, like all of your stuff! |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abusethat's beautifully dark. |
| Eve's Deception 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abuse"she is the static" gosh enough said, that line alone takes my breath away. amazing. |
| rippling iris 2008-06-13 ch 1, | abuseo creepy and cool. i like it a lot. our can be one or two depending on how you say it (ow-er, or are). i love the second tanka. it's very vivid. great job with this. |