The punctuation was crazy here. You put periods in some really random places that aren’t sentences and then commas in places that are really sentences and some are questions. I might work on that a bit.
I like the whole rhyming thing, it is an interesting point. I also like all the fruit references, they worked really well. Nicely done.

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