I really like this piece. The only thing I'd change is the line 'A four letter word to which describes'... The grammar is questionable, and I think you could keep your rhythm and message (and keep the first four words) if you took a few moments to look through a thesaurus for something that would fit better. Everything else though, I like. And the last line, I can easily imagine being read by a second voice in the most tragic/cynical/cute/sarcastic tone.