” wrong/isn't/it?)”… comma after wrong
” As all is becoming lost,”.. As should be as
” Which I could only assume is the evidence of our sins.”… Which should be which
”So/I wait/Just like I have for the past 17 years/I wait.”… I think that could use some more punctuation
”(Oh, were only cliches.).”….we’re

For the most part your punctuation was great, which I liked, except those few spots I mentioned. I like the piece a lot because the format is really great. I also like the whole idea, especially liked the beginning because it’s very relateable in a lot of different situations.

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