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| Harmonic Discord 2008-07-17 ch 1,  | abuseI really liked the bittersweet tone to this poem, and the repetition of "Watch as I/watch me." It conjured up a very clear story in my mind. The imagery was beautiful. I didn't think it was too cliche. Okay, maybe the idea, but the execution felt pretty original. Overall, I really enjoyed this, particularly: "Watch as I fade with the horizon and crumble into stars" Well done! |
| kloun doll 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abuseall the things with "watch me" is as if you were dying 'cause of that love.. but the last part is kinda sweet and brokenheart. |
| Alien M 2008-06-14 ch 1, | abuseI like it; the simple command to watch as you fade away. It's not too cliche, I don't think. Lovely work! I especially like the ending line. ^^ =~+Rina+~= |