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| LadyRini478 2008-06-15 ch 1,  | abuseYou have one extra syllable in the first and last line. I like the poem, but how about try this: "One soul, slightly tainted Don't mind the rotted blood stains They're old, and we've changed" Good luck refiguring your haiku! |
| MagicalThinking 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abuseinteresting; its very interesting. it appears to have a story behind it, i mean like some sort of plot and here it is summarized...we can imagine the scenes however we would like, but the story is still there...very interesting--great job! ^_^ |
| Ashelin 2008-06-14 ch 1, | abuseOh, sad. No, not a haiku, but that's ok. A short poem doesn't have to automatically be a haiku, it just can be...something else. A poem. That's vague enough. I liked this, despite how depressing it was. Though I'm sure a lot of people feel like this. Good job. |