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| eating staples 2008-06-15 ch 1,  | abusenice line spacing- i thought the ending was really good with the repitition and the ending...i would have liked it if you repeated im guillible in so many ways more often in the middle parts though- i think it would've made the ending 'im trying to change that' more powerful otherwise i thought it was a very nice poem 5stars and a thumbs up :) |