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Awesome! Already love this story already, can't wait for the next chapter

I like this so far XD
Hope there's more soon

That’s right, took you long enough to spew this chapter.

I really really like it, I know I mentioned it before, but it isn’t like your other works, which is well, just different, not bad different, just different. It’s cool. You do good.

More, more! I don’t like hyphenated names either. I’d prefer if they just had ridiculously long names instead of hyphens. They throw me off.

Get to writing Lindell will you? And Easy? What a name.

Oi, me liking this story. You updating this story, K? Deal?

Interesting story. Can't wait to read more.

=) Mandraco.

So, I really like Spencer. He's totally adorable. And I'm so glad you updated. It feels like it's been forever. But anyways, loved the first chapter, loved this one :) More soon?

I like this story and kind of love Spencer's character. The plot is good so far. Update soon.

I love this story and want to see where it goes- now update!
Oh, this is the runawaysheet who is wa-aay too lazy to login.
I really want to know who Lindell is, wait- ws that his name. Umm.. chocolate (Lindt). Get to it then. Keep up with the story, need to know more about scrawny fool Spence and jock- whoever he is Colby. Like, how the heck did he know him and does he have motives. Wait- are you supposed to put the motives bit in with the coughs? Gya. Just update, K? Also, one other note. This isn't like your other works. Not the sweet and comforting stuff you usually do. I wanna see how you pull it off!

I do like this- the summary esp. has me excited for what's to come- there's just one problem. Real, whole brothers can't be a month apart... they have to be at least 9 months apart, unless Spencer was a premie- but even then it's not possible for it to be one month. That was bothering me, sorry >.> but I look forward to ch. 2!

I like Keegan and his friends!! >.< It's a good story! I hope you puts up some more soon!

Whew.
Alright son.
Here goes.
Okay, so I started reading this really not knowing what to expect. For some reason it came up in my "author notification email thingy" so I figured you had to be someone who was at least decent at writing. But still, you never know what you're going to get.
But man, I was really surprised. I was like, "Aight, I'll give this a try. I'll go for a few paragraphs and see where it stands." Because I mean really, when a story is complete crap, you can totally tell after a few paragraphs.
ANYWAY.
So yeah, I started reading and was very happy with it. Which surprised me because I'm not easily pleased.

Some of the things you did were just...ingenious. Whether you intended them to be or not. First of all, skipping all of the "I hate my family, here's my whole life story, pity me because my father's a drunk, I have no sense of gratitude for the fact that I'm actually living in a house" harangue that usually accompanies stories about moving was such a relief. Usually one can expect the usual hating of parents and being rude to anything that moves from a main character, but yours was very realistic in his annoyance, but sense of humanity at the same time.
Overall, you're narrative style is excellent. It's colloquial without being oversimplified. It's real. Not too embellished as to be fake, but not annoyingly cliched.
Um...dialogue's excellent, which I'm a stickler for. Very realistic.
Oh, haha, love the half-unconscious scene. Stream of consciousness was total believable. I do believe that if I were ever coming out of a coma, that is what I'd be thinking.
The only critique I'd give is that the characters at this point (and I know it's only the first chapter) are still too two-dimensional. Yeah, it's still early, but I feel like their resting on stereotypes and cliches. The typical "peppy-question-asking-loving-new-kids" girl is a bit...I don't want to say overused, but it seems like a generic character, you know? And yeah, there are people in real life like that, believe me I know a million. But I always feel like their the same way. Resting on a cliche. As...weird as that sounds. Either way, I always urge people to stay away from making that kind of stereotypical character. The others I feel will develop with time.
Just an opinion. If you're planning on developing her more, then don't even listen to me, because like I said, it IS only the first chapter, and I totally get that it's nearly impossible to set up that many characters in one chapter. But yeah, just a small tidbit of advice from what I've seen.
But yeah, I'm really, really loving this, which--and I'm really not just saying this--doesn't come from me often.
If you have any doubts about this, don't. I'm honestly looking foward to the next chapter! Please update this! :)
Until next time,
Lavitabella

I like. it's cute. spencer is a character I look forward to getting to know better.

Aw. This is cute. I love Spencer already. And, I like Brendan too, lol. he sounds pretty O: And Keegan. I love him too :D

awesome start of the story!

Plz continue!