Man...I was confused!But it was good...though confusing.Keep it up.

omg this is REALLY good! it describes the feelings perfectly.

it was good but and intense until you said he looked like brad pitt...i don't know i just think that it lost its impact after that. You shouldn't tell us who he looks like, just explain him or say that you couldn't see him in the dark. I think the things about her family don't need to be there, i think you could've put her family was not good and that she wasn't happy but i dont think you needed that whole description. anyway, i think it was good.