Hello! Your story has been accepted to the List; congrats! ^_^

P.S. I'm intrigued. We don't get to read fiction based on historical events all too often :) I look forward to seeing more of this. Keep it up!

Talent Searcher,
HauntedElegance

Lots of talking, but still very interesting. I love the fact picked Charlotte Corday as your subject. She is one of my favorite parts of the french revolution. Anyways, Keep up the great writing! ^,^

Omg, this is like..the IDEAL chapter. The dialogue was so good! I felt as though I was actually there, hearing what dupperet and charlotte were saying. Their words and expression of tone are completely and totally realistic. You have a great talent for writing. I can't wait to read more.

PS: Posted chapter four of Ukime no Tanoshimi

Wow, I'm impressed with you knowledge of the French revolution. I agree with you, it's a very interesting topic. Very well researched. Thanks for putting it up for reference. Hope the rest of the story is this good!

- Dixon of Dresden

PS: I posted Chapter 2 of 'Ukime no Tanoshimi: the Torment of Pleasure' up, if you'd care to take a look at it. Hope you'll like it!

I absolutely love the way you put quotes into the prologue. They make you feel as though you can actually hear Jean-Paul Marat and Charlotte Corday saying them. Very Intriguing and Interesting. Can't wait to read more!

- Dixon of Dresden

Querty007, I rather enjoyed this chapter, a great way to start the story. Your right we actually don't know too much about Charlotte but I think your intepretation will be a interesting one. The curious girl who wants nothing more then her country to be back on it's feet and out of the wrong hands. You've done your homework I can tell. You definately know the French Revolution by heart, the dialogue was superb, it really gets one pumped up. I enjoyed how the pacing eventually leading to Charlotte's little escape plan and how one of the guests spots her. My only little concern is the lack of detail maybe a bit more description in the other characters and maybe her impression of them. Other then that keep on going comrade because this is shaping up nicely.

Absolutely perfect chapter. :) I'm beginning to know more of Charlotte than just the name (you showed her personality excellently!), and you're also introducing me ahead of time to the building up of the Revolution. I also like how you started the chapter of her reading about great heroes. Sort of foreshadows who she is to become..in time. You have beautiful writing, too.

However, I'm still confused as to what is happening so far, and am itching to read more. ^^

Happy writing
writtenwordsaremagic

ah, it has been so long since i've seen a prologue that's different from everyone else's. [the prologue] was creative, and i cannot wait to see what else is in store!

Well I actually took a course on the French Revolution this year so that info is like a review for me. It's great that you trying to be as accurate as possible and hopefully you will keep that up during the story.

Interesting prologue. The quotes made sense. I liked them. Good so far. Hopefully the real chapters will be quite a bit longer though. Update soon.

I've never read a prologue like this before.
I loved how the lines, simple lines correlated with the quotes.
It's so special!
And it gives the reader a sense of foreboding as well...
You didn't explain much, and that gets us into a rage of wondering what has happened. The quotes only add to the suspension. Since I don't know the story of Catherine Corday, I'm really excited to find out more.

Hope you'll post soon!
Merry

Great idea Querty007, Charlotte Corday is a very important person in the French Revolution and her actions spoke volumns. All though you just started I found that that the prologue was very weak. This was right after the incident when she got arrested yet you gave a very poor account of the events. You could have gone more into detail and talked about what lead up to the event instead of just having a few lines briefly stating what happens. All though I don't know what your purpose is I hope you reconsider what your going to post and add some more detail and colour to give the readers a better picture of what happened exactly.

great beginning, and descriptions. the quotes make it very unique, in a good way.