just lovely. open-ended pretty words. i like it.
my only suggestion, and it's really nothing big, is that i think "slip slowly" would have even better syntax than "slowly slip".
nice work.

firstly, i noticed that all of your stories and poems have very intriguing titles, so im going to read more once im finished typing this :)

I dont really have alot to say about the peom except that it was very beautiful and the imagery was fantastic

beautiful, deep, and thoughtful. Good job, though I think many give up on finding a deep meaning in it. It took me some thinking, and rereading...and it doesn't help that I am listening to loreena mckennitt

I liked it. The beginning part worked well together and I liked how you separated out away. The only thing is the first part is punctuated gramatically and capitalized correctly, but the second part isn't. I might want to change one just so they are both the same.