Loved it.

I am in awe.

Wow, you are a really good writer. I love the third section the most, and the ending lines are some of the best I've ever read.

I don't know what to say. The ground, the stars, and the moon references are unbelievabley unexpected and far above what I could imagine.

I use parentheses a lot, so I always love that.

McKinley

I liked it. Good piece.

Faith

I think the 2nd stanza is the best. What's a empyrean?

I love "i." & "ii." you paint such awesome scenes with your words.

I think that the "(worthless)" at the end of iv. is unnecessary because it's already understood from the word "starless" ...at least I think so.