Reviews for you scorch my lungs

thelouderthebetter 2008-06-18 ch 1,	abusei like the wording and where youre going with this. its a tad choppy, though, and that doesnt seem intended. if it was, maybe make the intention a little clearer. if not, make it flow. i generally see line breaks as representing a pause in the reading voice, but here that leaves the poem feeling awkward when it could be really evoking.
fairytale failure 2008-06-18 ch 1,	abuseGreat emotion in this piece. I loved the last lines; it brings to mind the image of the writer being the crusty bits stuck to an oven.
ShockingReality 2008-06-18 ch 1,	abuseDescriptive, intense, emotional...very nicely written