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Reviews For: You're The Reason

simpleplan13
2008-06-24
ch 1,
abuse2 things I didn't like...
1. The voices in my head line, sounded like you were crazy, but I think the point you wanted to make was that your mind told you to leave him, but your heart wouldnt let you
2. Ending it with a period since the whole piece is not one sentence.

I did like the piece though because it's very relateable and sweet. I especially like the last line.
Imperia
2008-06-19
ch 1,
abusei know this feeling well and you did a wonderful job of portraying it.
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