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| simpleplan13 2008-06-24 ch 1, | abuse2 things I didn't like... 1. The voices in my head line, sounded like you were crazy, but I think the point you wanted to make was that your mind told you to leave him, but your heart wouldnt let you 2. Ending it with a period since the whole piece is not one sentence. I did like the piece though because it's very relateable and sweet. I especially like the last line. |
| Imperia 2008-06-19 ch 1, | abusei know this feeling well and you did a wonderful job of portraying it. |