It makes me think of someone finally facing repressed memories. It says a lot in few lines. Well done.

-Adrian

I like the format of this, really interesting. Nicely done.

I liked the imagery of the line "the shamans of her future". However (and I know I'm a little slow sometimes in these things), I wasn't really clear on what message you were trying to convey. I also felt that having a comma after the "and" interrupted the flow quite abruptly. I would really like to know what the piece is about though, as it has an intriguing air to it.

Kikyuu from The Roadhouse.

rg


what i liked- i liked the structure of the poem and how it was broken apart. i also like the italics at the end.

what i didn't like- the message wasn't too clear to me. i sort of had the idea, but i wasn't really sure on what you were trying to convey.

Wow, this is short but it works really well. Quite powerful and striking imagery with the ghosts etc. Well done.

Holli x

Mysterious. It's almost like a premonition, or deja vu. Beautiful imaginary - I love the 'shamans of her future'. Great job :)

short yet sweet =] i like it cuz it's just kinda mysterious and you don't really know what it pertains to...but at the same time, i would kinda like to see a little more background on it. i do like the format of this, and i don't see any error of any kind. overall its a great job =]

this is beautiful.
i really like the concept and the entire way all the emotions were portrayed.
amazing job.

yours until the wind changes,
gg