This was a great chapter too. You clear some things up, but add so many more questions about the plot at the same time. Keep up the great work, and write more soon!
I would be flattered if you featured my story on your website. Please let me know the site URL once it's up, so that I can check it out! Thanks.

Hey this was really good. i read it a while ago, but i guess i forgot to review!
It was good, a little fast paced, but other than that, i nice chapter!
You wrote this really well. update soon!!

This was good. A little fast-paced, but other than that, I enjoyed the twist about his uncle and the introduction of Laden. You might need a little more description but other than that, not too shabby. Oh wait, a few typos too you should go back and revise...they were just a little stumbling block through the flow of your story but no big deal! im not trying to be harsh at all, i love this story & im just trying to help your story be as best as it can be!! :D

So good! What an ending! I really really hope you update soon. there were a few places where you had questions but no question marks and some spelling errors, but who really cares right? i just thought id point them out.
this was good!! please please update soon.
p.s. would you mind checking out a story of mine?

oh, sounds exciting!! you write really good and have the comings of a great story!!
i wonder what this Knixi is and what it has to do with anything...

Hey there, it's me again. Sorry for the late review though.

Oh-oh. Explanations! I wonder what's the intention of the Knixi...:P

Anyway, that's all for now. I'm looking forward to read more.

Happy writing and have fun.

L~

An entertaining next chapter! I really enjoyed it along with the mystery inside! I can't wait to read the next chapter when i have time!!

Hey, thanks for reading my first chapter. I put up more too.
That was really good! First, I have to say that the name Ronan fits with your character flawlessly. The Knixi seems to come right out of a story of Irish faeries. Is it based out of an existing story? Or did you come up with this on your own?
Great cliffhanger ending to chapter four!

wow good chapter. i already like Ronan and i can sense a good story coming!
:)
nicely done!

I liked it. I don't know what, but something has changed with the...vibe?setting? I don't know.
Keep it up, Caliese.

(Don't forget to R&R me)

Banish the evil writer's block. Put some of your other stories onto this site!

Aw. That was sad. Don't you just hate having to write death scenes?

Write more, if possible. Byes~

Haha this is funny. Ops, I mean when Ronan stepped on the dung with the sheep staring at him with its little eyes~ Aww...

Oh my, is Ronan seeing things? Kicking ball? Sounds spooky to me. XD

My god. Is the little boy's Ronan when he is still a child? Tell me, tell me! Hehe...

Aww poor Ronan. His father was dead and now it's his uncle's turn. Poor boy, poor boy.

Knixi? Hmm. The plot is starting to move again, hehe. And definitely it is getting more and more interesting.

Anyway, I think that's all for now. Thanks for the review and everything! Hehe!

Happy writing~ ^^

L~

That's good, Caliese. Is the reason why he has to sleep inside...?
I won't say exactly b/c someone might read the review, and it might spoil the story.

~your BFF,
Chandra Grace.

"From the town square all could see a cloud..." - who could see?

"What is this, he thought." - question mark instead of a comma

"'Can I interest you in anything.'" - question mark

"Roan felt a wave of guilt spread through him." - I'm not sure why exactly he feels guilty. What did he do wrong?

"The kingdom, called Redmont, Ronan lived in had been at war with the neighboring kingdom, called Gorlan, all his life." - the sentence needs to be re-worded

"...'is there anything you’d be needing.'" - question mark

"There were blacksmith’s shops for the knight’s weapons and armor." - blacksmiths could stand alone without "shops"; also, knights' (plural) would fit the sentence better

"'Ronan,' said his uncle, 'how are you.'" - question mark

The bit with his uncle is inexplicably odd. I'm assuming that will make sense later on as the story progresses.

"I recognized the man, it was his father." - in context, "I" should logically be "he", unless this was part of a thought (in which case, it needs to be made more obvious)

Nice work overall. A bit more description wouldn't hurt, although don't go overboard. I'll check back in with the next chapter.

Keep it up!

at first, i wasnt exactly inrigued but once i got to the hunting scene i was totally sucked in! the scene was excellent. the personality of your "creature" hunting was clear and i felt how cunning she was. good job.
maybe read me?
~MagicWords~