Your sense of meter is really developed, I believe. [I'm not too keen on meter myself, so it's kind of hard for me to tell.]

The way this is written, it's really easy to relate to. It doesn't really focus on the pain and it's refreshing to see hope at the end of a somewhat sad poem instead of the usual.

Very nicely done.

And as a note, I've noticed that you use a lot of rhyming in your poetry. Try to break away from that once or twice as an exercise. =D

Wow! I really like this! It sounds almost like it could be a song. Great writing!

~Shenhua Phantom

aww, i really enjoyed this poem. i can relate to it very well, it reminds me of a situation i am going through currently. anyways, great job. :)