Hey :)
Bhahaha.
Now that had to be all kinds of awkward! LOL 'Did her jigglies flop around as much as that?'

Heh. George. Guys like that .. .grr

Haha I just started reading this, but I like it.
I don't know who she'll end up with though.
The stuff with her teacher... *shudders* not cool at all.

Poor Toni. first she gets pushed, then molested. Gawd, some people..

x can't wait to see what you come up with next
P.S was the mysterious bedroom vistor Remy? Because if it was I will laugh so hard. Hehe. That girl is all types of evil.

oops i meant toni -_-;

:( poor tony.
aaron and eric are cuties.
i love this story ^_^ good job

Update please!

I do wonder what that girl is going to do when she finds out "you" is Toni.

I only read the first chapter, but I like it !
I'll read more tomorrow and review.

I liked how you kept information back ~ e.g. little description of the couple, and revealing Toni's name towards the end of the chapter as it does act as a hook to get the reader's attention. In addition, I liked the characterisation you did through dialogue ~ the guy seems nice, but also so damn male at the same time, and you conveyed that very well through his two lines.

Other than that, you probably could've thrown in a little bit more description, even of the surroundings, as when I read this, I imagined it being set in a hotel room... :S

~ Sakina x

very cute! I hope you continue!

OMG I hate you! Only four chapters and it hasn't been updated in what...7 MONTHS?! I shouldn't have started reading this. I KNEW I was going to like it. **. lol. I want MORE!

awesome! i'm really liking this story. tis very the interesting. haha. but i'm a lil confused. did aaron join in in the beating up of george? it seems like eric did most of the work though and aaron just stood and observed.

It's Eric that she was with in the prologue, right?! I mean out of the two, Eric is the playful and inappropriate one. =D

Lemme guess it's Remy?

Anyhow, I'm trying to figure out who the guy in the prologue is- Aaron or Eric. I should go back and reread to see if there are any clues.

Update you ho !

Okay, okay, what to start with? First of all, again, the writing's much, much, much, MUCH better than the first real chapter. You did a great job of describing Toni's emotions throughout the entire thing. I can't imagine writing a character's reaction to possible rape, but you pulled it off. I especially liked your description of how she didn't want to "feel the ghostly touch of memory" and how "the situation felt a lot larger than just a “well, if you weren’t raped, it’s all good.” I was seriously feeling shivers the entire time.

As for Aaron and Eric, they're both still a little 2-D instead of fully real, but I guess that that's because we're still in the earlier chapters. I still like Aaron infinitely better and I hope to further get to know his character and personality.

Last of all, great way to keep a reader hooked. I'm thinking that the girl in Aaron's house (it is Aaron's house, right?) is Remy, just because she seems so clingy, but I could be wrong. Update soon.

Wow, talk about a dramatic ending. Great job on this chapter, although I can't really say that for the last one. Last chapter was a little too cheesy and a little too descriptive (she went on about Eric entirely too long. Maybe you had meant for this? But it got a little boring, to be honest) for my liking. I suppose that it could just be me, but my suggestion would be to have more subtle descriptions of your characters.

So with that said, this chapter's been greatly improved. Personally, I like Aaron a lot (man, blue eyes are sexy, what can I say? lol) and am glad that you didn't go all out with Toni's rantings about him. There were quite a few funny phrases here and there (ladies tossing themselves at Aaron’s bed -- or couch, or car, heck even his toilet) and your writing is much better in this chapter than in the previous one.

Hi, so I thought that I'd return the favor of reviewing (very belatedly, so sorry).

Hmm, as of right now, I don't have much of a thought except that this is intriguing and that I'm glad that I clicked on this story. ;)